Gun Slate
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need to qualify this rap before finalizing it: I am the opposite visonary to weaken "You spit like he never took out the dictionary! I also spoke too literary, you can try to stop the loss, but all necessarily end beat and lyrics that slice eardrum as a kitchen knife The real MCs are in the dark night wakes, but want cred and fine, as long as the young MC's not try to stay up past bedtime and your "career" sa clean slate and nothing to brag about all that spitting is af $ # out of ggets mouth Everything you say is @ Pack GATS, GATS and grab the gun basically embracing all that spitting is wack and redundant No wonder the girls are not w / ti all that spit does not apply to you, the diffenence between you and me is that I do not lie like you .... LA PAZ, for those who still have not seen my own rhymes @ jrexzY is only some of the bars I go to my actual song arsenel unstructured
I like the style and rhyme scheme of it at first. I'll be honest I think the first part IMO is better than the second, seems a bit like losing a little towards the end, I think you used the whole "spit" line a bit too much, I would usually say three times is sufficient for this purpose, we used 4. The ending is a bit odd, I suppose not have really got a major issue that is sticking, but Idk, I just feel that does not fit. To ensure better if you start strong, strong finish, there is nothing worse than a song gradually becomes weaker and weaker. I hope that helped. Edit: Yes No I think it was a well-formed track. Have you done a complete song?